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Saturday, April 5, 2008

Critique - Mind Bottling










Alright! Much better, that's it! I think that pose works much better than the previous one.

Now what's left are just technical things:

- the paper being thrown away, right now they move all over the place, give them a nice curve and more accurate physics
- the idiot's screen left hand at x142. It goes from a fist to open and moved to the left at x143, then the wrist rotates 90 degrees within one frame and goes up, then a bit linear to the right and then up. That whole section this to get smoothed out with nicer arcs.
- his left elbow gets tucked in a bit fast after x40, plus it goes in and out, so just slow that down
- his left hand doing the twirl. I would keep it within the same rotation. Right now he's doing it counter clockwise and then clockwise, plus the arcs are a bit choppy, smooth that out as well
- his left hand thumb does a quick turn at x186, I would not stick it out that much, keep it in
- the finger poses at the end on both hands are nice, but they seemed mirrored. Change one of them a bit

The nerd still got eye problems. Check x121 for instance, you can hardly see the pupil. Same with x162 and x210.

Work on that, but you're almost done! :)

2 comments:

Olivier Ladeuix said...

oh my god! I haven't been here for few weeks and it looks like I have some serious catchup to do! A lot of great links too! Thanks JDH

Jean-Denis Haas said...

Hahaha, yeah, there are almost daily posts.

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